Beyond the Veil – Snippet

Happy Friday!  I have scheduled a release for New Year’s Eve.  I hope you can drop by.

Today’s snippet revolves around Logan’s POV.  He regrets the way his date with Aubrie ended.  He has intentions of apologizing.  He’s caught off guard when he bumps into her in Katie Tibideaux’s drug store.  Unable to find the words, which will show her how sorry he is for walking out on her, he flounders in the sensations he has when he sees her.  Hope you enjoy!  Thanks for dropping by.

Beyond the Veil

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A jingle came from the front door.

“Hello?”

The female voice sounded too familiar.

“Katie?  Are you in the back?”

“Be right there,” Katie called from the bowels of the store.

The voice had him frozen in his tracks.  Unwilling to admit he had a moment when he’d almost bolted for the door.  Prompted by the fact safety lay just on the other side, Logan scowled down at the bottle of fish oil – ‘one thousand count, made from the finest fish from the north sea.’  “Coward,” he growled under his breath.  Turning, he headed for the counter.

“Hey, Logan,” Aubrie greeted him as he approached.

Her faint smile reminded him of the reaction of the nurses at the VA after he awoke from an episode.  Their faces always registered detachment framed in caution.  “How’ve you been, Aubrie?”  His hands automatically went into his pockets.

“Fine, how about you?”  Her smile warmed a little.

His mind registered the look of long golden brown tresses hanging down her back.  Soft curls bounced as she shifted from one foot to the other.  By the gods, but she looked good.  “I’m fine,” he said with precision.  Lying was one of his better skills, he mused.  Her standing there made him crave the urge to reach out.  Logan imagined taking one of those long, satin strands of hair in his hand before twirling the silken smoothness around his finger.  Languishing in the soft, sensual length made his shaft harden.  No, there was no ED problem when it came to her.  Discounting the notion, he jerked his head in the direction of the garage.  “Gus is trying to kill me slowly, I think.”  Her gentle laugh eased the tension he sensed between them.

“Yes, I’ve noticed you guys are swamped most days when I go by.”

“You came by?  Wait, I missed you?” he questioned.

“No.”  Her brow furrowed.

Logan’s gut tightened.  Shifting, he searched for a calm he was not sure existed.  With Aubrie so close, his world went to general quarters.  Her nearness had his heart beating like a piston.  Afraid his head might explode, Logan took a step back.

“No, I just noticed when I’d drive by is all.”

The moment was broken as Katie stepped up to the counter.  “Hey, you.”

“Hey.”  Aubrie’s tone immediately shifted to intimate friendship.

Silently wishing her response to his question had been similar, his hand automatically went to his chest.  The familiar pain lodged there ached with a deep longing.

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Country Music and the Story

Country Music and the Story.

“Difficulties are Inevitable, Discouragement is a Choice.”

Reblogged from Southern Writers Magazine.

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Eliminate Filter Words For a Immersive POV Experience

This post is well pressed from Writers in The Storm.  Check out this valuable information from Janice Hardy, who shares writing resources on her blog The Other Side of the Story.

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Decades ago, a detached, omniscient point of view was all the rage. Readers wanted to be told a story, so the stories read as if someone was indeed telling them. That style faded as readers sought a more immersive read, and tight points of view became popular.

Regardless of who the narrator is, that’s the person the reader experiences the novel through. A tight first person narrator, an omniscient third, a limited third, it’s all filtered through somebody’s eyes. Sometimes this filter is invisible and the reader doesn’t feel any distance between her and the point of view (POV) character. Other times the filters are obvious and the reader feels the wall between her and the characters. One style looksthrough the eyes of the POV, the other looks at the POV.

What adds this layer?

Filter words.

Filter words distance the reader from the POV character. They remind readers they’re reading, explain things that are obvious, and often lead a writer into telling. Even worse, filter words are frequently found with their passive, telling cousins, pushing the reader even further away.

If you’re after a tighter and more immersive POV experience, you might try looking for and eliminating these filter words.

Redundant Filter Words

The easiest fix is to get rid of words like, saw, heard, felt, knew, watched, and looked. What makes these words feel detached is that they’re explaining that a character saw or heard something, and then the narrative goes right ahead and shows it anyway. POV characters by definition are relaying everything they sense, say, and think. If it’s described, readers know the character experienced it in some way. It’s like saying, I’m going to look at something, and now I’m telling you what I looked at.

Let’s look at some examples:

Lisa wandered through the field and saw three crows sitting on the fence. Their black feathers glistened in the morning sunshine. She heard them caw the way crows do, and watched them take flight and soar across the bright, blue sky.

I could hear cars whooshing past. The sound of horns blared against my ears, muffled by the morning fog. It felt cold and clammy, sticking to my skin like a layer of wet cloth. It smelled musty, though I knew fog couldn’t possibly be musty.

Notice the extra layer. The character is relaying information in a detached, after the fact, watching-me-do-this tone. There’s a feeling of an outside person describing what the character sees and hears rather than experiencing the same things through that character’s senses.

Look at these same paragraphs without the filter words:

Lisa wandered through the field. Three crows sat on the fence, their black feathers glistening in the morning sunshine. They cawed the way crows do, then took flight and soared across the bright, blue sky.

Cars whooshed past, their blaring horns muffled by the morning fog. It lay cold and clammy against my skin like wet cloth. Musty, though fog couldn’t possibly be musty.

Now the POV character is describing what they experience without telling the reader that they’re looking or hearing or smelling. The reader feels closer to the POV, and can imagine themselves in the story instead of watching the story from afar.

Revising to eliminate filter words is an easy way to achieve a tighter POV, and even fix any told prose in the process.

Do you prefer a tight or a distant point of view? Why? What about it captures you as a reader?

BIO:
Janice Hardy always wondered about the darker side of healing. For her fantasy trilogy THE HEALING WARS, she tapped into her own dark side to create a world where healing was dangerous, and those with the best intentions often made the worst choices. Her books include THE SHIFTER, and BLUE FIRE. DARKFALL, from Balzer+Bray/Harper Collins. She lives in Georgia with her husband, three cats and one very nervous freshwater eel. You can visit her online at www.janicehardy.com, chat with her about writing on her blog,The Other Side of the Story, or find her on Twitter @Janice_Hardy.

We Have a Winner

Thanks to all the people who left a comment and email during the Hot Paranormal Nights Blog Hop over the weekend.  I enjoyed hearing from each reader so much.  For those who didn’t win, if you’ll send me your mailing address, I’ll drop a lovely signed bookmark in the mail to you.

Congratulations to Sherry S!  She won an ebook copy of Waking Up Dead!  

Mark your calendar for October’s Quarterly Blog Hop when I’ll be sharing an excerpt from part 3 of The Western Werewolf Legend.  You never know – you may be a winner!

If you’re new to my work, may I suggest a free sample at all the major locations – here’s the links to Amazon for Comanche Haven and The Lady in the Mist.

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Catherine

Hump Day Hook – Gotta Love a Cowboy

Good morning and thanks for dropping in today.  I’m interviewing Celia, from Comanche Haven, book 1 of the Loflin Legacy series.  Let’s begin.

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Do you enjoy a western romance?  Do you imagine yourself immersed in the 1850s and struggling to be a lone woman?  How about a lone woman with Comanche blood coursing through her veins?  How about a Comanche war chief’s only daughter who has been away for more than a decade.  Her world has been very different from the one she returns to in Texas during one of the most turbulent times in the state’s history.  Her father is always at odds with the white settlers, and the young warriors want blood.  She, on the other hand, is an educated woman with a talent for healing.  Her last position was Fort Sumter, South Carolina.  Now her father is gravely ill, and she’s back to take care of him.  Please let me welcome you to Celia, or Little One, her Comanche name among The People.  She’s recently agreed to this interview by telegram.  Now that she’s back, she’d like to share her thoughts and opinions about the town of Tyler, Texas and those she remembers from the past.

Thank you for agreeing to speak to me today, Celia.  I appreciate you taking the time.

I am honored to speak to you, Catherine, regarding my arrival and The People.  So much has changed.  I am looking forward to seeing my father again.

How long has it been since you saw your father, Lone Eagle, Celia?

More than ten years.

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That’s a long time, how much has changed since you were here.  I’m sorry, but I must ask, why did you leave?  The readers, I’m sure, are interested in knowing.

Yes, it has been a long time since I was home.  My father wanted to keep me safe from all the conflict between the Comanche and the white man.  The reason I left is complicated.   Let us just say; my life was threatened, and my father sent me back to my mother’s people in South Carolina.  I was sent to boarding school and a finishing school.  Then I acquired a position as a physician’s assistant at Fort Sumter.

My, but I have to say, that’s amazing.  Not only because you’re a woman, but more, because you’re half Comanche.  Did you find it difficult to fit into southern society during your years there?

I’m sorry, I don’t mean to laugh.  It’s just that to speak of it seems so trite.  You’d have to be there to understand completely.  My mother’s mother saw me as an embarrassment to the family and quickly disposed of me in a boarding school.  I then went on to a finishing school, and when I turned eighteen, I found a job at Fort  Sumter as a physician’s assistant.  The Army, apparently, was laxer in employing a half-breed.

I see.  Fascinating, indeed.  You got a telegram recently from your cousin, Broken Horse, a representative for The People in treaty talks.  He told you your father was gravely ill.  Is that why you returned?

Yes, I sold everything I owned and packed to come back to Tyler.  I’ll be traveling to his camp shortly, and I hope to treat his illness.  My father is the only parent I have left.

I appreciate your concern for you father.  Will the tribe welcome you?  Are there others you remember from your life before leaving Texas?you father.  Will the tribe welcome you?  Are there others you remember from your life before leaving Texas?

The People are a proud people with deep roots.  I will welcome them as they welcome me.  I will be home.  There are others who I remember quite well.  I would be pleased to see the cowboy, Seth Loflin again.  He was a friend of The People and my father loved him.  I…I cared for him very much.  You’ll need to allow me to go now.  I have to leave.  Broken Horse has arrived.

Indeed, I appreciate you agreeing to speak to me. I  wish you…  What… Miss Celia, what’s wrong?  You look as though you’ve seen a ghost, Celia.  Here, sit down.  You’re as white as a sheet.  Can I get you some water?

I…no…I thought I saw someone.  I was mistaken.  Thank you, no, I have to go now.  My apologies.  Good-bye.

Of course, I understand.  Good luck and God’s speed.

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As she walked away, I’d like to point out that Celia seemed quite disturbed by the appearance of a certain cowboy.  He’s a tall, dark haired man.  My, but he’s handsome.  I’m going to go over and see if I can speak to him.  “Sir, excuse me.  Sir, uh, I’d like to ask you a question.  Quite disturbed by the appearance of a certain cowboy.  He’s a tall, dark haired man.  My, but he’s handsome.  I’m going to go over and see if I can speak to him.  “Sir, excuse me.  Sir, uh, I’d like to ask you a question.  Quit disturbed by the appearance of a certain cowboy.  He’s a tall, dark haired man.  My, but he’s handsome.  I’m going to go over and see if I can speak to him.  “Sir, excuse me.  Sir, uh, I’d like to ask you a question.

Yes, ma’am.

What is your name?”

Seth Loflin, ma’am.

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Well, there you have it.  Thanks for dropping by today.  Enjoy book one as well as Casey’s Gunslinger and the cliff-hanger prequel, Salvation’s Secrets, which is free.  You can view these westerns and my paranormal tales at http://www.amazon.com/Catherine-Wolffe/e/B006ICE8SO

Catherine Wolffe

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Four Stars for Waking Up Dead from The Jeep Diva

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These are the kind of posts I love to wake up and read.  Rachel at The Jeep Diva gave Waking Up Dead 4 stars and 4 flames!  Without further excitement on my part, here’s the review:

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Review: Waking Up Dead (The Western Werewolf Legend #2) by Catherine Wolffe

by Rachel

I really like this series. I think part of it is the setting being during the Civil War. Also the vampires are the bad guys in this so that is also a little change up from other books.

Let me start with the villain first. It is revealed at the end of the story just who is behind the vampire attacks in this story. I was very surprised and was not expecting it to be who it was. Not spoiling it for you though! I did like that the vampires were hard to kill. It just made it seem more authentic to me because they are already dead and shouldn’t be easily killed in a fight with a werewolf.

There wasn’t quite as much romance and sex in this story as there was in the first one because of the circumstances present in the story but there was still enough. I like that they had General Jeb Stewart back in this story as well as Sonja’s sister was also in it a lot more.

I did have some problems with this story at times though. It seemed like it jumped around a little bit and it made me get confused and had to re-read it in a couple spots. Also I thought that Sonja was more cross with Ty more often than what she needed however I also know she was frustrated but it made me want to shake her at times. She was determined to show that she could do everything that Ty could do and refused to ask for help.

Even though it still had a couple things that confused me I feel it still deserves a four star review because I feel the plot itself was even better that the last book and that action and adventure was also better. I will continue to read this series. I like where it is going.

 

Rachel